VibesInTheSubstrate t1_j49v7y4 wrote
Reply to comment by Thunderingthought in [PM] Give me something out of the box, something abstract. It doesn't have to entirely make sense. I'd like to try to write an unreliable narrator, maybe? by Thunderingthought
Tremendous descriptions in here.
>I felt like I was walking down an aisle in a church, towards an altar. Or towards a casket.
That line gave me delicious chills. And the repetition of 'There was no one there.' really hammers in the confusion and paranoia.
I also liked the line
>The eyes observed me, simultaneously impersonal and engaged.
because it reminds me of a scene from this short animated piece called Puparia. Check it out on YouTube if you haven't heard of it, it has an otherworldly, abstract mood that I suspect you'd vibe with.
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