JAMSDreaming t1_iueib4x wrote on October 30, 2022 at 6:47 PM

Reply to comment by mwjfoster in [WP] People have superpowers. Yours is the ability to create a hivemind. It has grown too large and is now labeled a global threat. by Idontluvmenoonedoes

Woah! I love it, I love it so much! An extremist kind of villain protagonist... although I have seen a bit of a plot hole. If the President is a telepath and can hear the screams of the servants... why can't he hear Willbur's screams?

mwjfoster t1_iueqhyx wrote on October 30, 2022 at 7:41 PM

Someone pointed that out to me. I thought about editing it, but I'm not sure. Wilbur believes in Oliver's (the MC) vision so he isn't screaming to be set free. As head of Homeland Security, he knows only too well the evil in the world and thinks this is the cure as Oliver does.

mwjfoster t1_iuer5jf wrote on October 30, 2022 at 7:45 PM

I decided to change it after all.

JAMSDreaming t1_iuesv85 wrote on October 30, 2022 at 7:56 PM

Oh, wow. It looks better now that it explains why can't the President see the trap.

mwjfoster t1_iuet48f wrote on October 30, 2022 at 7:58 PM

I agree. And I think the idea of having some minions who truly believe in his idea of utopia was a stroke of genius, not to pat myself on the back. It adds an extra layer of control for him. I like to think of them as his trusted lieutenants in a sense.